My feedback was much more detailed than your 3 brief points above!!! We get far too quickly and easily into the blue man's appearance, with too little build-up on this character. The backstory might be better intercut, possibly in sepia or B&W, and the meeting with the blue man in a less mundane setting (with a more shocked actor) - he could freeze time for this? Need to see more of the weirdness of things going backwards, for which the Red Dwarf episode "Backwards" and the Twin Peaks concept of the black lodge (search youtube: twin peaks black lodge) would help. Eating/drinking backwards obvious egs. Not sure if blue man speaking at all is best idea, or at least not until he has thoroughly terrified your main character The core idea's a nice one, but you've not fleshed it out as much as you both could. The lengthy footage of getting up could be shortened to add more of the backwards effect, and maybe more backstory too
Righto. Should have probably spotted these videos out sooner. Unless all lessons were taken off tommorow however, we will not be able to re-film for tommorow 3pm...so that sucks. Will hand in what we have and get on with evaluation but was thinking of re-fliming anyhoo, even if you didnt allow it handed in, for personal pleasure and youtube-ness.
My feedback was much more detailed than your 3 brief points above!!!
ReplyDeleteWe get far too quickly and easily into the blue man's appearance, with too little build-up on this character. The backstory might be better intercut, possibly in sepia or B&W, and the meeting with the blue man in a less mundane setting (with a more shocked actor) - he could freeze time for this? Need to see more of the weirdness of things going backwards, for which the Red Dwarf episode "Backwards" and the Twin Peaks concept of the black lodge (search youtube: twin peaks black lodge) would help. Eating/drinking backwards obvious egs.
Not sure if blue man speaking at all is best idea, or at least not until he has thoroughly terrified your main character
The core idea's a nice one, but you've not fleshed it out as much as you both could. The lengthy footage of getting up could be shortened to add more of the backwards effect, and maybe more backstory too
Righto. Should have probably spotted these videos out sooner.
ReplyDeleteUnless all lessons were taken off tommorow however, we will not be able to re-film for tommorow 3pm...so that sucks.
Will hand in what we have and get on with evaluation but was thinking of re-fliming anyhoo, even if you didnt allow it handed in, for personal pleasure and youtube-ness.